Revision of Draft #1

The first draft of my Academic Article Summaries Paper was flawed in a couple of aspects. After receiving comments on my blog about it and reading it over my self I have changed all of these errors. My paper seemed like it jumped around a lot and didn’t really have that great of transitions as well. I think what helped me out the most were the blog posts from other students. I mean when I read it I could find grammar errors and other spelling mistakes but I definitely could not see the main flaw in my summary. With other people reading it, I got an outside opinion on my paper and that helped me tremendously. I lacked transitions throughout the paper and didn’t really do a good job of summing up my thoughts and articles in the conclusion. Also it didn’t meet the length requirement which some one noticed and informed me about. I also did not mention the names of my articles which kind of made it confusing to the reader because they couldn’t tell when I was talking about a new article or the same one. After strengthening my transitions and including the names of the articles I used, my summary was already looking much better. Then I corrected all of the grammatical errors and spelling and went into a little more depth with some of my points. This lengthened my paper to meet and actually surpass the requirement and I felt it was complete.